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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #90 on Feb 25, 2010, 5:44pm »		[Quote]

Feb 24, 2010, 11:56pm, lola wrote:
Disperse your collections, you amassers of precious things,
You hoarders and estate builders, while there's still time.
The old man next door died the other day,
Still clutching, intact, his set of antique grudge.

As an inveterate hoarder, this one jumped out at me. And exonerated me with the last line, as I do not bear grudges (that I know of).
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« Reply #91 on Feb 26, 2010, 6:31pm »		[Quote]

Feb 24, 2010, 11:56pm, lola wrote:
Disperse your collections, you amassers of precious things,
You hoarders and estate builders, while there's still time.
The old man next door died the other day,
Still clutching, intact, his set of antique grudge.


Unforgettable and beautiful, Lola. I have hand written it into my journal. :)
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #92 on Feb 26, 2010, 7:50pm »		[Quote]
I'm very flattered. Thanks, dear all!
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« Reply #93 on Feb 26, 2010, 7:52pm »		[Quote]
I love it too, but wonder if there was once an "s" after "set of ....grudge"...
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #94 on Feb 26, 2010, 8:19pm »		[Quote]
I wondered about the 's' as well.

But, your poem really is the bright, shining key to the locked door of 'the unforgiven room'. Some of us need that more than others.
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #95 on Feb 26, 2010, 8:25pm »		[Quote]
Very kind, Jazz! I know I need it. "You" being "me" in this case.
I liked it better without the "s".
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« Reply #96 on Feb 26, 2010, 8:45pm »		[Quote]
I am absolutely horrified that the ad at the top of the page proposed an "OCD Recovery Retreat." >:(
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« Reply #97 on Mar 12, 2010, 10:46am »		[Quote]
I,too,was very very taken with your poem Lola,and also wrote it down in my little book I keep.
Very,very beautiful.Thank you,and do continue to write and share more with us!!
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #98 on Mar 23, 2010, 10:30pm »		[Quote]
A stick draws a circle on the beach.
Waves wash it away every time.
Wood floats across the ocean.
Strange hands may use it to draw a square.
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« Reply #99 on Mar 23, 2010, 11:19pm »		[Quote]
That's really lovely, Kerouac. So appropriate for a travel forum, too. It makes me yearn to go somewhere far away.
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #100 on Mar 24, 2010, 12:44am »		[Quote]
Mysterious, K. Makes me want to draw a square with a stick.
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« Reply #101 on Mar 24, 2010, 10:22am »		[Quote]
My mother patrols the corridor all day
drenched in sweat as she clutches the railing.
In her youth, she was a graceful athlete.
Some day she will cross the finish line.
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« Reply #102 on Mar 24, 2010, 3:01pm »		[Quote]
Wonderful, kerouac.
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #103 on Mar 24, 2010, 3:45pm »		[Quote]
That is so powerful it made me cry.
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #104 on Mar 25, 2010, 9:18am »		[Quote]
Flames swept over the dust
Smoke in the oval mirror opposite the bed
Aquamarine waters of the Caribbean
Attempt to squelch the smoldering embers
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #105 on Mar 25, 2010, 10:37am »		[Quote]
Casi - you express the situation so well :'(

Kerouac - that's exactly how we'll all end up. Dread thought.
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #106 on Mar 25, 2010, 2:32pm »		[Quote]
I love that, Casimira!
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #107 on Mar 25, 2010, 2:40pm »		[Quote]
Grazie!
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #108 on May 6, 2010, 10:40am »		[Quote]
Dawns early birdsong
Breaks the quiet of a long dark night
The dark oily lines of our shoreline
Birds wash in, silenced by our greed.
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #109 on Jun 3, 2010, 8:20pm »		[Quote]
So close and so far away
Steely tendrils cling to me around the globe
Scissors are sometimes so blunt
My hand aches from trying to clip
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #110 on Jun 3, 2010, 8:41pm »		[Quote]
^ excellent.
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #111 on Jun 7, 2010, 9:29pm »		[Quote]

Mar 25, 2010, 9:18am, casimira wrote:
Flames swept over the dust
Smoke in the oval mirror opposite the bed
Aquamarine waters of the Caribbean
Attempt to squelch the smoldering embers


foreshadowing the gulf oil leak, casi?
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #112 on Jun 8, 2010, 3:27am »		[Quote]

Jun 7, 2010, 9:29pm, kimby wrote:

Mar 25, 2010, 9:18am, casimira wrote:
Flames swept over the dust
Smoke in the oval mirror opposite the bed
Aquamarine waters of the Caribbean
Attempt to squelch the smoldering embers


foreshadowing the gulf oil leak, casi?


Yes,Kimby,at 4:18 a.m.on March 25, I saw it all coming down...no one would listen... :-/

(it's a poem about a friend's apt. in NYC that went up in flames while he was on vacation in the Yucatan,a personal tragedy)
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« Reply #113 on Oct 8, 2010, 1:13pm »		[Quote]
Fluttering in the warm autumn sun
leaves are slowly drained of green.
Grim clouds lie in ambush,
icy tears ready to undress the branches.
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #114 on Oct 8, 2010, 7:32pm »		[Quote]
My eyes can see what you see.
My ears can hear what you say.
I yearn for yesteryear
When what I seen and heard, I understood.
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #115 on Feb 11, 2011, 10:06pm »		[Quote]
He sees pink lines in the sky,
delicate and mysterious as evening falls.
The cracks in the footpath have no colour,
so unlike the sunset contrails of happy escape.
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« Reply #116 on Feb 11, 2011, 11:13pm »		[Quote]
Happy man, finding fun in everything,
yet serious in learning, wise in what mattered.
We cry as we remember you, even as we remember
how you lived your life with laughter.

(with love, to Michael Higgins. 1946-2011)
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #117 on Feb 11, 2011, 11:23pm »		[Quote]
I dare these few words in memory,
Although only an Emily Dickenson could do you justice.
It was a long, often hard day, my friend.
Take some rest now.

(for Dusty, who just went home from Florida)
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #118 on Feb 14, 2011, 11:26pm »		[Quote]
Lovely, K, Bixa, and Mich. Thanks.
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Re: How to Write a Chinese Poem
« Reply #119 on Feb 15, 2011, 3:33am »		[Quote]
Thanks Lola, this would be the first poem I have ever written and since I have put in on my Facebook page and many friends liked it. I explained that it was a Chinese poem and what I learnt which inspired others to join in. :)
Cheers,
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